Great essay great introduction however i think you could elaborate a little more in your body paragraph and maybe make a couple additional points to better back up your thesis? Other than that its a good essay especially strong intro paragraph.
Great job Grace! Your introduction and thesis were particularly strong! I think that you could have added a few examples of how he conquered the evils he was facing. Other than that good job!
Great essay great introduction however i think you could elaborate a little more in your body paragraph and maybe make a couple additional points to better back up your thesis? Other than that its a good essay especially strong intro paragraph.
ReplyDeleteGreat job Grace! Your introduction and thesis were particularly strong! I think that you could have added a few examples of how he conquered the evils he was facing. Other than that good job!
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