Here it is, the next installment in the very exciting series known as "Prompts." This essay has recieved no reviews as of this posting, but I'm sure it will be a giant success, or at least not a miserable failure.
Good Work! good points and good evidence to back it up. also very good use of diction especially as well as the other techniques but especially good diction. Very good work!
You did a great job of adressing the prompt without useing too much summary. good idea adressing the young man being an effect of the bumble's past, but one thing I would have done would be to foucus a little more on the treatment of the bumble. Describe how that mutilation caused loss of innocence, and how that loss opf innocence is present in the young man. Also your conlclusion seemed good, but perhaps unrelated to the promt compared to the rest of your responce.
Good Work! good points and good evidence to back it up. also very good use of diction especially as well as the other techniques but especially good diction. Very good work!
ReplyDeleteYou did a great job of adressing the prompt without useing too much summary. good idea adressing the young man being an effect of the bumble's past, but one thing I would have done would be to foucus a little more on the treatment of the bumble. Describe how that mutilation caused loss of innocence, and how that loss opf innocence is present in the young man. Also your conlclusion seemed good, but perhaps unrelated to the promt compared to the rest of your responce.
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